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shameless self promotion to a new level.
One of my students made this to help promote the school. It is a trial run for a little bit longer of a video (a 2 minute video). I'm looking for some constructive criticism
Let me know what you think!http://youtu.be/0_QP2uBEhOA
After watching eddies last video Im terrified to watch anything else
Glad i skipped out on that oneQuote:
Originally Posted by Brent Smith
I like that show different people hitting moves not just one person like yourself pulling everything off, it shows your ability to teach I think.
Dope!
The moment you inserted your middle and index finger forcefully yet precisely in my asshole, I knew I wanted to learn all that you could teach me.
The promo is sick. On the real.
Personally I don't like music on videos of this type at all. I put music on my most recent Marcelo Garcia video ("Marcelo Garcia at Chelsea Piers") but I've made dozens and dozens of videos without music. I find it distracting and it also separates people because although we may all love JJ, we all have different tastes in music. I didn't like the music on your vid, and if I were a potential customer that might subliminally turn me off to the school. (Likewise, someone who dislikes hardcore music might be turned off to Marcelo because of my choice of music on that recent video).
I think jiu jitsu videos work best when they focus not on the technique at the school, but rather the personality of the instructor. If you watch my Marcelo videos you learn that he is humble. If you watch my Eddie videos you see he is funny. The different personalities show through the videos and if you were trying to chose a school, you would know which instructor is best suited to your personal taste.
I'd suggest for your next video, you try to capture your personality so people understand what the tone of the school is.
Hope that helps...
It sucks multiple cocks.
Bobby you did pay for an experience...I felt obliged to provide.Quote:
Originally Posted by bobby rivers
I like the video. It's put together well. Honestly, I'm not crazy about the music, though. Personal preference, I guess.
Is it for TV or just for intrawebs?
+1Quote:
Originally Posted by Brandon Mccaghren
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Originally Posted by bobby rivers
lmao.Quote:
Originally Posted by jeremy "the gerbil" arel
Loved that triangle at :15.
Jeremy, the following comment is assuming you want to use the video to help promote your academy and get more students. If that's not the purpose of the video, please disregard.
As an online marketer, this is what I see. I think the video doesn't do enough to make your potential students aware of their deepest pains/frustrations and then convey what your school will do to take away those pains/frustrations.
Depending on who you'd like to appeal to most (parents of children, hardcore BJJers, middle aged desk jockeys, etc.), examples could be: being bullied, feeling like a wimp, having no confidence, having an unattractive body, being overweight, parents' fear that their kids will grow up lacking self-esteem or go astray from ennui, etc.
It was a smart thing using a female student because that conveys the idea that a fundamentally (physically) weaker individual can learn to effectively defend themselves against a bigger, stronger opponent (issues solved: self confidence, fear of being overpowered by a man). However, the average jiu jitsu newbie is going to see this video and think it looks cool but in all likelihood won't really "get it" -- certainly they might miss the connection between doing acrobatics in a kimono and how it resolves their most burning problems.